This week for writing we had to write about what we would do to help the planet in the future or what we would do to help the class if I were class president.
What would you rather do write about what you would do to help the planet in the future or would you rather write about what you would do to help the class if you were class president?
Here is my writing
Change in the future
In the future I would like to see….
People treat the homeless animals with food and care.
Currently people walk past the homeless animals and don’t do anything about it.
Once I saw a stray cat on a walk with my mum,it was black and white with a little bit of dark red in its eyes. So if you see a stray animal it would be really good if you make the animal's day by doing something good to help it. Like give it food,water,try to find it a home or you could adopt it.
Kia roa Erin! Kei te pehea koe? I really like how you show kind things about looking after the animals. And I agree to be respect to the animals. Thanks for sharing~ :) -Hana-
ReplyDeleteHi Erin, I can see your care and passion for animals in your writing. I have a cat as well so I definitely relate to how it feels.
ReplyDeleteI like that you used a personal experience to convince your readers to help homeless animals. When you mentioned that the cat had 'dark red in its eyes', it made me wonder if the animal has been crying. By adding more descriptive words and discussing the animal's feelings, your readers will be moved to help even more.